Sarah,
I love it!
It so dramatic, sad and happy....
Do names Sarah and Xtina something to do with this forum???
Yes... it is great! I still did not finish it completely as I am very bussy girl now...
I am working on all my languages and that´s hard work... and also
Back to your story... I personally have only one thing to say :
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But for me it is difficult to read it as you don´t write senteces- little more interpunction would be great .
I also had to use dictionary few times - what a shame to me

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I love your style. Maybe the text needs being

..... haha - I am just joking.
I would never be able write in English anything like this - I admire you for this.
You could also write a poem and send it to poetry con-*test*-('") till the 15 August (that´s the dead-line) so WickedBrdway (spel?) would be happy

coz the theme is